Life in its Simplest Form by Allison Lotito
This piece of writing spoke to me the most because of what I have in common with it. Its a beautifully written poem about my favorite season. Phrases like "wind...whispered words into my ear," allows me to create a vision in my head of the colors, sounds, and scents of October. This piece uses symbolism and mature vocabulary, which suggests that it is directed toward a more advanced literate crowd. If I could conference with Allison, I would tell her not to be afraid of using creative and more developed vocabulary. In the poem, she goes in and out of using good vocabulary to better her piece. If she had used "slightly" instead of "a little," her piece might flow eloquently. Although my choice may have been somewhat biased with fall being my favorite season, I truly think this was a beautiful piece of writing about a beautiful time of year.
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